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Jen
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March 2011
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The Masque of Red Death- a work in progress

*sigh* Writing The Masque of Red Death is proving to be a difficult task. I know what I want it to be, but I can't make it sound the way I want it to. The first verse I love, but the rest of what I have sounds like everything I've ever written, except there's too much bollox in it. I sound trite and immature, lacking body and soul. It's annoying the fuck out of me. Here's the first verse, many re-writes are in order though.

The Masque of Red Death:
Have you ever wondered
What it's like to be
Chased by Death?
The cold, clammy hands
That drop you where you stand?
The sharpened blade
Of the scythe
That take your life?

I have

That's all I have so far *sigh* Oh and here's a quote from Starsailor, which I probably shouldn't be listening to. "I want to love you but my hands are tied, I want to stay here but I've been denied let's watch the clock until the morning sun does rise"

Current Mood: numbnumb
Current Music: Starsailor-Tie Up My Hands (as quoted above)